Monday, 26 October 2015

Follow-up study for the Bittersweet Love - I


I thought about writing a short off-topic follow-up about analysing what went on to the work of creating the short-story - “Bittersweet Love”; how I approached and polished it.

Without further ado. The story came out initially only as a frustration of how much I worried about that I couldn't write up dialogue between two characters. The first iteration was only the dialogues itself, without anything else to support it. Turns out I was not as hopeless as I had imagined.

A hour later, after making the first sketch. I decided to push the first sketch a little bit further away. Letting my imagination to fill in the blanks and describe the setting more.

I did not want to take 'his' or 'her' side inside the story. So I ended up going with the third person, although 'she' clearly strikes out as the protagonist for the story. It is 'her' viewpoint that is the stable and permanent inside the story, not 'his'.

While working with the second sketch, I disliked the idea about describing the surroundings to a great detail. So my only goal was to assist the reader in immersing to the emotions between the two. I had not used premeditated oxymorons before. But the following paragraph was an attempt to see how far I could take it, when describing emotions:

They sat down on the chairs, holding hands. The two pairs of eyes connected with each other. Telling a tale of longing. Of an anguish. A hot frozen heart, melted in an instant; emotions lost in past, blazing into a life anew.

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My goal there was to describe that moment when two people, that had once felt love towards each other were having a reunion and their hearts still remembered. The challenge was to describe that abstract feeling with words. It is something that can't be described with pictures, only with words. That was one of the parts of the short story that I did not imagine happen inside my head; I felt it.

I'll probably revision this story in the future. However I won't change the second sketch. I really want to keep it as a testament: “Look, this is how much mistakes I made back then. You too have what it takes!” Truthfully, it took me months of hard work to reach here and I still feel very insecure.

It is possible that I will write a follow-up about other stories to come. Especially, if this helps me to improve as a writer.


~ Thanks for reading or skipping my ranting about this subject! I am not a native speaker, so some of the silly things can never come off as natural for me. ~





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